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Date submitted

01.05.2010

Date Updated

03.11.2010

Into The Woods

by IntoTheWoods

Book: Science Fiction/Fantasy, Romance, Adventure, Paranormal

Imagine a world where everything everybody around you thought wasn't real... came to life.

Life for 16 year old Myress Dean has always been a bit dull; except for her visions. Ever since she was 10, she has experienced little glimpses of the past about whoever is around her. Almost half-way through her junior year of highs school, a mysterious group of teenagers shows up. Each one of them seem to be strange, yet compelling in their own way. Especially the girl with the violet eyes, named Shadow. When Myress suddenly begins seeing a 'door of light' in the small patch of woods behind her house, the pieces of who these strange new kids are and why Myress has visions seem to fall into place. Myress discovers she is the guardian of a secret world called Venaltra, where every mythical creature is real. When her little sister is suddenly taken and another guardian threatens to reveal all of Venaltra's secrets, it seems Myress is the only one that can save the day. Now, Myress has to make a choice. Her little sister? Or an amazing world that changes her life forever?

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Mari-Angela:Ryder

wrote 2 hours ago

on the "go until trina" part, isn't that supposed to be untie?

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Lycanthrope

wrote 1 day ago

OMG!

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Lexi Linn

wrote 1 day ago

ok....suspicion unconfirmed LOL...not who i thought it was :P
anyways...getting eager for that climax!!! :D

*Lexi ^^

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WendySue

wrote 1 day ago

Hey there! I’m liking your story and writing style a lot, so I hope you won’t mind if I get nit-picky with the critique. Sometimes I get a little crazy when I see a piece with big potential.
Few minor corrections/suggestions:
“…he has been beside me” (no “s”).
To condense, I would change the last sentence of 1st par to, “We have braved things that no normal brother and sister could imagine.”
“The area around the scar is still inflamed, but no longer oozes.”
(Okay, you get the point about condensing sentences to make them stronger, so I won’t do anymore of those.)
Cannot – one word.
…boring plain white sneakers – maybe choose ‘boring’ or ‘plain’, but both is redundant. “mismatched”.
“Which is a huge difference from yesterday’s…”
Ooh, ooh, ooh! I’m loving the way you incorporated her vision of her friend’s morning bathroom battle! It’s SO much better to show us this than to tell us outright what she can do. I’m loving the voice of these characters and their obvious rapport and interaction with one another. Awesome, realistic-sounding dialogue.
Kellan is horrifyingly ugly when she’s POed - hahaha! That line is hilarious!
This is good stuff! I will try and read more eventually. I've got a lot of catching up to do.
Good luck to you. :)
-Wendy
(my book is Angel Prophecy, by the way, in case you have a chance to take a look)

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Kazul9

wrote 2 days ago

You had me at "look like two giant turds." XD
You have me intrigued and curious, I'll definitely be coming back for more. (I was only able to read the first chapter for now.)
I love the style and the flow, and not to mention your names are awesome. I can't find anything to critique on, overall a great read.

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Tstaf4d

wrote 2 days ago

Very intriguing, fast passed without losing the details, I believe I like it. The twists are a nice touch also. Congrats!

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Nightrose131

wrote 2 days ago

May I say it again: this is absolutely brilliant. It's such a page turner with all the cliff- hangers. Wonderfully written.
Please update.

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Lexi Linn

wrote 2 days ago

update. update. update. update. update!
i will repeat my earlier comment: stupid felix!!
and now, 90% of my suspicions have been confirmed!! LOL ^^ the other 10% will come at the end!!
keep updating!

*Lexi ^^

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ily:)

wrote 4 days ago

Love the end of chapter 44! So suspensful!!

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WendySue

wrote 4 days ago

Hey,
I'm new on inkpop, and I've just added your book to my watchlist. I hope to be able to read and leave feedback today or tomorrow, but I like to ask first if there's anything in particular that you'd like me to focus on?
Thanks :)
Wendy (Angel Prophecy)

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Lycanthrope

wrote 4 days ago

I think a little piece of me just died. I need more book *sob*

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bOoK_gEeK =)

wrote 4 days ago

UPDATE OR I WILL DIE!!!!! YOU COMPLETLY LEFT US HANGING!! :) PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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rainshadow

wrote 4 days ago

UPDATE OR DIE :) I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS SOOO BAD!!!

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Lycanthrope

wrote 4 days ago

Very, very interesting so far! I cant believe it still manages to get better with every passing chapter.
I love that she calls her DTEF.

I notices in chapter 41 (or section 41) that it says "she liked to me and so many others" rather than lied.

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cara_ruegg

wrote 4 days ago

"recipe for some meat thing." i get she doesn't know what that is but idk if I really liked that. Also your sentences seem very long but then again so are mine. It's a classic-thing lol. :p When they speak in a different language it's really funny. i hate when people do that too! lol. "flowery scent explodes in my room" nice detail.

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geekchicgirl1

wrote 5 days ago

This is probably my favorite book yet. It's really addicting, and I lost track of time when I was reading it. I love all of the Crimson's unusual names. Please post more!

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Courtney Driscoll

wrote 5 days ago

of course this would be in the top picks, you have a beautiful way with words.
I love the character names, unusual and memorable. Great use of description, you really sucks the reader in.
The paranormal is really prevalent on this site but this book stands out as one unlike any other.
An addictive plot, and your vivid imagery makes this a memorable story that I plan on reading in it's entirety very soon :)
great job keep up the amazing writing, and I know you will go very far.

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rainshadow

wrote 5 days ago

Please post more! :)

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nargles

wrote 5 days ago

Hmmmm I dont know. I actually sort of agree with dobby. Maybe its just the way you write, but im not completely crazy about this either! Im so sorry, i usually dont comment like this, but, i dont know. I do like the fact that there's a british character ;)

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LuxorTiger

wrote 5 days ago

Erm,that was a wack comment. But your book has such a colorful use of words,you describe every detail to the fullest extent,which I love in a book. It puts me in their shoes. I love the feeling of going into a room and the characters thoughts,with everything fitting it right. Good Luck,my friend.

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ringettegirl01

wrote 5 days ago

This story is absolutely awesome! I can see why it made a top pick... Your characters are unique in a way that most characters arent. My favourite so far is Myress, but I think Lana is great too. You really spiked my interest when you mentioned that she was having 'visions', causing me to wonder why she gets them. Also the prologue, about the mark made me seriously wonder what the mark was from. I will definately be back to read more. :)

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alicynne

wrote 6 days ago

keep up the great work[:

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Lexi Linn

wrote 6 days ago

stupid felix!!! grrrr >.< REALLY don't like him now. you are continuily confirming my suspicions! LOL :D
great chapter!

*Lexi ^^

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lit.lover

wrote 6 days ago

Wow, this is sooo interesting. I have to know what happens next! i really hope your writer's block passes, i hate those, but i'm sure it will, you're a great writer :)

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ily:)

wrote 6 days ago

Love itt!!!! ♥

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rainshadow

wrote 7 days ago

Gosh. You have to update.

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Lexi Linn

wrote 7 days ago

yuck, writer's block :( it passes :D
anyways, i love this chapter!! it's totally amazing!!
btw i apoligize ahead of time for my bad spelling. i recently injured my right wrist and i'ts very awkard to type with a brace on my hand :( it'll get better soon :D
*Lexi ^^

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Maiawa

wrote 7 days ago

god same here i HATE writers block. once i wrote 9000 words and just deleted them. then i felt realy crappy so i tried to get them back. but then i deleted againg. POINT IS you just gotta do as lycanthrope said andd keep writing even if you end up deleting it. i love your book so far i feel like lana is my old best friend reincarnated. anywho i dont have my work posted yet but great job!

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Lycanthrope

wrote 8 days ago

Aww, i hate writeres block. I solved mine by just lunging in, but i'm not sure thats the best plan, even now that it finished at a beautiful 98666 words. I'll let you know if i think of anything huge, but otherwise its up to you to write the book. We can only express opinions and ideas as the Peanut Gallery.

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Lycanthrope

wrote 8 days ago

Great as always ;)

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Lexi Linn

wrote 8 days ago

woot woot!!!
great job! :D

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Tom Porteous

wrote 8 days ago

Sounding really good! Can't wait for the next update! Hope your writers block goes soon :(
Noticed one thing that didn't make sense; "She might just realise that there have been hints about her sister being a guardian." Should that be "follower" not "guardian"?
Otherwise another great chapter! :D

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IntoTheWoods

wrote 8 days ago

Hey everyone,
I have some good news and some bad news.
-Good news first: WE ARE ALMOST AT THE CLIMAX OF THIS STORY!
Things are just about to get REALLY REALLY good. There will be a HUGE fight scene within the next 10 chapters or so. So look for that.
-Bad news: Im having a bit of writers block.
I'm having some trouble INTRODUCING the climax for some strange reason. I know exactly what is going to happen, I just don't know how to put it into words.

I know you guys have been dying for updates, but I haven't been able to produce chapters as easily as I have been able to in the past. Please keep checking for updates. I promise, after these next 3 chapters are done, the climax will be here and before you know it, Into the Woods will be completed :)

If you have any ideas or anything or just feel like talking to me, feel free to email me at:
xomusicluvaa@aol.com
Thanks for understanding you guys!
And thank you for helping me become a top pick !
-Jess <3

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ily:)

wrote 9 days ago

great job amazingg book!! :D

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Jakob Kai Neumann

wrote 9 days ago

Hey, I left a comment here a long long while ago, I've been checking back quite a bit ^^ I thought I'd just say congrats.

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rainshadow

wrote 9 days ago

Oh god. I jsut CHECK BACK FOR MORE EVERY DAY. And there never is more! Please update. You always leave me hanging and I'm half/half with that. I love it that you can keep and audience engaged but I hate it that you just... leave it at a cliffhanger EVERY time! ...

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AllyLeian

wrote 10 days ago

I just really like this book! it is AMAZING!!

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celticdruidess

wrote 10 days ago

wow! this needs to be published! and the leaveing me in suspence is not nice! really good!

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Lindsy Mitchell

wrote 11 days ago

i enjoyed this book very much...it's diffrent and unique.I deffintly hope it makes it to number one.

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Lycanthrope

wrote 11 days ago

w
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Dr.Seuss6

wrote 11 days ago

This book is amazaing! We need to get it to number 1

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VioletEyes

wrote 11 days ago

I'm only on Chapter 10 and I'm hooked. I like how you read from Myress's point of view and also Shadow's. (BTW, I love that name) I also like how this story isn't a typical vampire story. What an original idea, vampires that take energy instead of blood. Good work, can't wait to read more!

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Never Love

wrote 11 days ago

Fantastic writing!

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Gabriela V

wrote 11 days ago

"i know this might seem to be a bit extreme" i love how you put that in there. becus it would be considerd extreme to a reader and some of us would disconect from the story becus we would not be able to do something like that ourself.
you have some awkward phrasing " i took a seat at the bench at the bus stop".
i like how you mention a charator and then quickly after put a memory or a fact to him or her. it gives the other charators a quick background to go from.
the overall flow is realy good~!
the charaters are not only built up well but are likeable and interesting.
the only problem -and its minor- would be that there are alot of chars at first and i dont know if they are all mains or flats charators.
and in the other chapter there is a little lack of emotions on the guys part.

other than that i would actaully love to keep reading :) and i dont find that offten here.

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rainshadow

wrote 11 days ago

Oh god! Just... dont leave it like that! EVER! My god WRITE MORE!! Am I obsessed? Yes, I think so. Oh well. PLEASE! I do actaully need more or I WILL GO INSANE :)

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Tom Porteous

wrote 11 days ago

When I first saw this, I thought not another vampire drama, but I've read all of it now and think it's ace! Your imagery is really reaally good, I can imagine myself being in the story. Your characters are also brilliant! You give just enough to know what they are like and who they are, and a little room for the imagination to fill in the rest! Love the story line, kept me wanting to read more, and I hope there is more to follow!
Only a few slight criticisms... I find there are a few loose ends which distract from the main story. The two ones I noticed are when Myress meets Eloira and Calyx in Venaltra, and when they meet Kallan and realise she's a faerie. The characters don't seem to make much of an appearance in the rest of the story since those points, and they seem a little unnecessary? The number of characters becomes a little overwhelming, and leaving out a few moments like these would make the story a little easier to follow? I don't know whether they will have any significance further on? Secondly, I find some parts of your writing a little disjointed in places, the flow of the story gets a little interrupted. In most places it's great, but in others, the sentences seem a little scrambled. The short chapters probably doesn't help with this, and writing in first person means you have to jump about a lot.
But yeah, otherwise I think it's great! Love it, and can't wait for more! :)
--Tom

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╝Frøggy╕

wrote 11 days ago

No way!!! My name is Jessica 2!

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╝Frøggy╕

wrote 11 days ago

Wow! I haven't even started yet and it sounds awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! =D

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J.L. Penn

wrote 11 days ago

Great pitch! Love the prologue and especially the style contrast with the first chapter - that shows depth of talent. This is not a genre I know a thing about but I like your style. I also like the fact that even though you're clearly dealing with dark subject matter, your opening sentence doesn't take itself too seriously. It sets a good tone, and again that contrast. My one constructive criticism is to watch out for typos and grammatical/punctuation errors in both the pitch and the interior. I've added this to my picks. Kudos and best of luck! :)
-Jenn

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The Masquerade Games

wrote 11 days ago

I just started chapter two and I'm pleasantly surprised(:
I honestly didn't think I would like it at all, but I do, a lot!
I'm so happy that there are so many chapters(:
I think you have just supplied me with a new addiction.

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