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Rank 1060 (-16)
Word Count
349
Date submitted
01.23.2010
Date Updated
02.13.2010
by Exiled_Muse
Poem
For the dead in Haiti.
Cry tears of sorrow for the dead, those gone that fateful day on January 12, 2010. Pray, plead to the loa, to the spirits of the vodou and whisper your torment to the guardians of spirits past, to the protectors of the living and beg for mercy.For those who have yet to hear the song. Go to youtube and search for We Are the World - 25 For Haiti.
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wrote 10 days ago
I think this was a very powerful poem. It's so sad yet it has so much emotion at the same time. You did such a great job with this. -CCB
wrote 57 days ago
Really wonderful, I'm Haitian myself so I can relate.
wrote 100 days ago
this is super sad i got a friend from haiti
wrote 145 days ago
wow.this made me cry.honestly, id never cried reading things here in inkpop but this kind of piece, wow, i felt like i was slap in the face because this really awakens me into the realms of reality... thats all, im going to add this now in my picklist...
wrote 150 days ago
Ok, wow. This is an amazing poem. It is powerfull. '...lift/Fallen spirts with the courage/To overcome..' That is amazing. The imagery is amazing, especially the last stanza. '...her bright colors. Smiling with Laughter at the sun...' This line is amazing.
This is so amazingly beautiful. It is definately a tribute to Haiti and her people. It was an honor to read such fantastic work. I usually don't put poems on my picks, but this deserves to be. Thanks for writing this! -Diane
wrote 153 days ago
this is pretty good..i can tell u hav talent..i like the desciptive images that u portrayed and the lines bettween the stanzas were unique and added to the beauty of the poem.
This was beautiful. I haven't read anything like this before. Your style is very unique which makes it stand out. The descriptions you give are so vivid! and your message was very heart felt.
wrote 155 days ago
This is so beautiful. Its like a cross between a song and a prayer.It's so very sad and a fitting piece to honour those that perished and comfort those who survived.There is a lovely element of hope in the end, which is really uplifting.Gorgeous work.Leigh
wrote 157 days ago
You wrote this with your heart and that makes me feel joy, where others might only feel sorrow. You, like so many other people in the world, have contributed to the appreciation of and effort in Haiti's recovery, and helping people recognize the anguish that the country-- the people, went through. On the flipside, the format rocked and the tribal feel of it by using the native religion's figureheads made the tone into the lament and prayer I think you wanted it to be. High quality :)Signed,Joe
wrote 158 days ago
Aww, this is so sad, and yet so beautifully written. I'm 100% sure that everyone who knew someone who died in Haiti would be sobbing they're eyes out when they read this ;(
I started crying when I read this; it was just so touching. I really like the right alignment of the certain lines. It wasn't typical, and it added a little something to it. [Sorry-I don't really know how to describe what it added; it just did.] I adore the third stanza: "Speak, mon loa, / Tell the tale of the fateful day / The isle of Haiti trembled / Born of the Caribbean seas, / Sheltered by the Atlantic, home to / The brave, the free, the living / -and the dead" . That last line definitely started to make me tear up. It was just such a powerful poem.
wrote 166 days ago
great job! :)
wrote 167 days ago
Wow, this is as Poem said, a beautiful memorial. I really liked it. I actually just saw a mission group off going near there so it means extra to me. Really great righting here, and excellent thought.
wrote 169 days ago
This came out as a beautiful memorial. like something you would read on a stone at the feet of a statue. vry beautful and touching. pick listed
wrote 172 days ago
This is really good. I loved your strong verbs like mirrored. And i love the imagery. Also i like the form of the stanzas. Great JoB!!!
Another awesome poem! I like your style.I love the sound of "sun-ripened Africa".
wrote 181 days ago
Amazing. That's really all I have to say about this. So-so-so amazing. (Hah, aren't I good at this review thing?) But really . . . I don't think I could tell you how beautiful this is.
As soon as I have room, this is going on my PL. I have goosebumps. And chills. This was starkly beautiful. I have no words. I'll leave a more detailed comment once I can figure out how to articulate what I want to say; describe how severely this struck me. I'm stunned. It was that good.-Kara
wrote 184 days ago
an amazing interpretation of the disaster! i almost cried... this is definitely going on my picks!
Wow! This poem brings a very hopeful face to this sad event; you did an excellent job with it. Again, the way you incorporate mythology is amazing and shows a depth of knowledge on the subject. I cannot think of any improvements to suggest, so I suppose all that is left to mention is that it’s going to my pick list. Good job!
wrote 188 days ago
This poem gave me goosebumps! This is a great poem in the midst of a tragedy. You represented the spirit well.
You are an amazing writer. You inspire me to keep writing, no matter the subject and try to make a mark on society. Keep doing what you love to do. If the people in Haiti could see this, they would see hope.Jenna
wrote 189 days ago
This is intense and tragic, but infused with hope and life. There is a great feeling of deliverance for those who died, prayers for them to reach the realm of spirits.The poem is sensitive and strong, with elements of Haiti's colourful and spiritual heart intertwined with messages of healing and courage.Beautifully done!
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