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Rank 7907 (-63)
Word Count
110
Date submitted
11.22.2009
Date Updated
by ~DreamChaser~
Poem
Your stronger than you think, but when your heart is torn, you can't hold back the tears
I wrote it after i got upset, i think its an okay poem, but its up to you to rate it :)
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wrote 202 days ago
wow! I can literally feel the - power - raging out from this poem. This is exactly how i felt like when my heart was ripped to shreds. I write when Im upset, but gosh, its never this great.this could be put to a song...seriously.--> Carter
wrote 203 days ago
I love writing when I'm upset, too :) Did it make you feel better? Haha.I love this. Beautiful <3
wrote 212 days ago
Loved it. Don't even have any complaints. Except in the title I think sorrowful is spelt with one L.
wrote 223 days ago
Fabulous.
wrote 231 days ago
such an amazing poem. very beautifully written and extreamly powerful =)
Extremely powerful
wrote 268 days ago
I LOVE THIS POEM, it's really good.
wrote 270 days ago
I love it, it really captures a strong emotion, but in a calm way, it also flows nicely. Great job
wrote 272 days ago
intense and that's what i loved about it. just what i want to see in a poem. If you have a min. can you read some of mine. thanks
Strong ending. I have always had such a hard time with my endings. I start strong and then it just kinda flops. It's slightly rocky on the flow but the words are powerful. Awesome Job!
wrote 279 days ago
wow, good poem i liked it =) you did a great job portraying your emotions
wrote 281 days ago
I enjoy the rhythm and rhyme. Sounds kind of like that song by P. Diddy and Jimmy Page, "Come With Me."I also like the sort of subdued feeling, with all lowercase letters. It gives the speaker a sort of an inferiority complex, which is what it sounds like from the words.Excellent work.
wrote 282 days ago
I love the emotion you portray in this. Very good work.
wrote 284 days ago
i love this, it reads really well and is very deep and emotional. really good :P i'd love it if you could take a look at some of my stuff too and tell me what you thinkl, thanks xxxxxxx
wrote 285 days ago
wow such a sad poem but deeply moving. ill add this to my picks when i have the room. Xcheck out my book when u have time too please
wrote 286 days ago
Wow this is powerful. Good work
the picture hooked me and then you knocked me off my feet with the poem, beautiful
holy smokes, you blew me away, this was really good. i luved it. erm, i know it's personal choice, but i feel like you should use apostrophies (i'm spelling it wrong) to make meaning clearer. also, whatever your decision is, be sure to be consistent. you have "won't" but "ill" and "im". but those are just tiny edits. AWESOME! love it!
this was amazing. this is kind of what I do.
wrote 287 days ago
Wow. I really loved the rhythm and rhyme scheme. Well done.
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